I've wanted to critique your vid a while back ago, but i just never gotten around to it until now. I've watched this video a couple of times, and i've spotted a few things (certainly some positives and some negatives). So i will break this down in 3 ways..
"What I Think You Did Right"..
"What I Think You Did Wrong"..and
"What I Think You Could've Done Better". But first things first..much props to you for the approach on this hot chick (she's a 9 in my opinion) at a coffee shop during the daytime no less! Trust me, i know..this took alot of balls to do. I can assure you that 90% of guys are not doing this..especially not during the daytime, and certainly not while sober (Given that i'm assuming that you were sober when you did this approach). So you fall into the 10% of guys who can actually do this (the percentage may be even less than 10%). No matter what i say, or what any other person on this forum says..you are already a winner! And you're way ahead of the game! So you should be very proud of yourself for that.
Now onto my critique of your pickup in this video...
"What I Think You Did Right"
1) You approached this hot HB9 chick in the coffee shop, during the daytime. Most guys in your position would've froze up once they saw her and felt that urge to approach her. They would've just passively stood by, watching her from a distance, as she waited on her coffee. She would've already gotten her coffee and left the shop, before most guys would've built up enough courage to even say one word to her. You did not do that. You approached her immediately. Savage!!
2) You even got her to go with you on an insta-date. Most guys wouldn't have gotten this far with her..let alone even approach her.
3) You led the interaction, and you led her physically.
4) You number closed her too.
"What I Think You Did Wrong"
1) During the conversation with her at the coffee shop..you seemed a little too excited (probably because you were a little nervous..which is normal), and you were talking to her in a bit of trying for rapport tonality. These are subtle things that you did, that you probably weren't even aware of. Now it didn't hurt your chances with her in that moment, but what it probably did was..it probably planted some seeds of doubt in her mind that
"He's probably not that alpha guy that he's showing himself to be" (because the very beginning of your approach was so alpha, and is probably what intrigued her enough to go on the insta-date with you). Excited nervousness and trying for rapport tonality is Beta behavior..which probably played a hand in her dishing out to you, some of the shit tests that she gave you throughout the entire insta-date.
2) You sat opposite of her at the table. This seated position across from the girl doesn't normally affect your chances with the girl, because most people on a traditional date, usually do sit across from each other. But that is only given, that the girl already knows that this is a "man-to-woman" situation (once that sexual premise has already been established), via your sexual rapport with her online..through text message..over the phone..or in a previous meet up (or previous meet ups). But since that sexual rapport with her has not already been established (because this is a cold approach, and you are in the process of establishing that sexual rapport with her)..sitting across from her, isn't the best strategy for fast escalation.
3) Some of the kino that you did on her (like when you touched her leg, and grabbed onto her ankle) was kinda weird and unnatural. Almost as if you did it just to do it, just to get your kino in. But there was no context to it that made sense for you to do that.
4) Sometimes in the middle of an interaction with a girl..she will tell you exactly what you need to do, to get her. But this information usually goes right over our heads. And this happens to us guys because..maybe we didn't think that it was all that important to address..we just ignore it, while our focus is on other stuff..or we just plain didn't hear her say it. Either way..we miss out on alot of these little nuggets of gold from girls. She told you that she likes "Touch and intimacy" (To me..that means she likes when a guy is sensual with her, and very close to her physically). To me..that was your escalation window. Were you aware of that, or did that go right over your head?
5) At some point during the insta-date..you completely gave up on trying to do any more verbal & physical escalation with her (probably because you thought that it was pointless to do any more verbal & physical escalation at that point), and as a result of that..you fell right into her frame. She didn't put you into the friend zone, you did. Once your verbal & physical escalation completely died..her attraction for you probably died right along with it as well.
"What I Think You Could've Done Better"
1) Try not to get too excited, even though it's just a natural reaction to you being a little bit nervous. Work on being a little bit more relaxed in your body language. Meditation can probably help you to have more relaxed body language. And talk with less "trying for rapport tonality", in exchange for more "breaking rapport tonality". If you can just tweak and fix these 2 things alone..your results with girls will probably shoot through the roof.
2) Again, like i said..she told you that she likes "Touch and intimacy". Had you moved to sit next to her once she told you that, as opposed to you staying seated across from her..you would've literally been in a position to be close to her, to comfort her, and to touch her in very sensual ways. And you touching her from that position (ie holding onto her hands, putting your arm around her back & shoulder, whispering in her ear, running your fingers through her hair, resting your hand on her thighs, making out with her, etc) would've been more natural and would've made more sense contextually.
3) Continue the verbal & physical escalation throughout the entirety of the date. Her telling you that she has some affection for some other guy (that she may or may not be seeing) shouldn't be your concern, and it was nothing more than a shit test from her. Your only concern is (and should always be) to continue the verbal & physical escalation on the girl, no matter what. Her logical brain probably did the thinking (about the other guy that she has affection for) for her. But had you raised and continued the verbal & physical escalation on her throughout the entirety of the date..at some point, eventually her wet pussy would've started to do the thinking for her. And it's funny how when this happens..all of a sudden, the girl forgets all about her chastity and inhibitions (which can also include her deciding to fuck you suddenly..even though she told you prior..that she doesn't fuck on the first date, and that she has a boyfriend). I know this to be true, from first-hand experience.
Overall..i think you actually did pretty well here. Your ballsy approach at a coffee shop, is what impressed me the most. I personally think that your pickup of the hot brunette milf at the mall, was even better than this one. My critique of what you did in this video, is very knit picky. But as you may already know..the devil is in the details. And it's in correcting the little detail mistakes, that is what separates the great results from the decent results. If you want to just be a decent pua..than just focus on the general stuff. But if you want to be a great pua..then you have to focus on the details. And girls (especially the hot ones) can pick up on, even the most minute little quirks in your behaviors, that you might not even be aware of yourself.
-G
